|Submitted by G.S. Williams on Thu, 11/03/2011 - 05:20|
I greatly enjoyed the Thor movie, the actors were all well-suited for their roles, and Thor, Loki, Heimdall and Jane Foster in particular were engaging. The cinematography was beautiful -- I found Asgard much more impressive than Green Lantern's Oa.
However, after having seen it, I wonder if a more interesting plot structure could have been devised, using the EXACT same scenes and dialogue, just in a different order. Hear me out:
At the start of the movie Jane Foster sees an Einstein Rosen Bridge (wormhole) in the New Mexico desert, and hits Thor with her van storm-chasing the event. She asks "where did he come from?" and then we get a LONG flashback to 925 AD and the battle between Asgard and the Frost Giants, then the childhood of Loki and Thor, then Thor's coronation ceremony being interrupted by Giants, and his subsequent invasion of their planet, the rash decision that leads Odin to banish him to Earth. Then he arrives for Jane to say "Where did he come from?" in a replay.
The rest of the movie is straight-forward -- Jane and her friends try to figure out why Thor seems so crazy but serious about being Thor, then trying to get Mjolnir from SHIELD, then meeting his Asgardian friends and fighting the Destroyer before Thor returns to Asgard to defeat Loki.
But here's my alternative plot structure: I would have shown all of the Thor on Earth stuff FIRST, from the moment of his arrival, and saved the flashback for LATER. You see, by focusing on the Earth events it lets the audience participate in Jane's confusion about whether or not to believe this blond dude is really a god of thunder. Maybe he's just delusional. Him trying to pick up the hammer and failing creates the possibility that he's just nuts (although there would still be the hammer to create ambiguity and hope).
Then, he could explain the backstory to Jane as a dialogue that becomes the flashback OR he could envision those events while he's "dead" from the Destroyer, before regaining his powers. I think it would be a more interesting take on "is this really happening or is he crazy" -- whereas starting with Asgard like that makes it evident that he's a hero on a quest to regain his honour. The ambiguity to me seems more interesting, but that's just what I would have done as a writer. It would add more weight to the tension between Jane believing in him and his behaviour as a god of thunder in a world of modern mortals. We know as an audience that she should believe him because we already saw the truth -- if we're denied that information as she is, then her leap of faith becomes weightier and the emotional journey stronger.