However: If I had made "Thor"...

I greatly enjoyed the Thor movie, the actors were all well-suited for their roles, and Thor, Loki, Heimdall and Jane Foster in particular were engaging. The cinematography was beautiful -- I found Asgard much more impressive than Green Lantern's Oa.

However, after having seen it, I wonder if a more interesting plot structure could have been devised, using the EXACT same scenes and dialogue, just in a different order. Hear me out:

At the start of the movie Jane Foster sees an Einstein Rosen Bridge (wormhole) in the New Mexico desert, and hits Thor with her van storm-chasing the event. She asks "where did he come from?" and then we get a LONG flashback to 925 AD and the battle between Asgard and the Frost Giants, then the childhood of Loki and Thor, then Thor's coronation ceremony being interrupted by Giants, and his subsequent invasion of their planet, the rash decision that leads Odin to banish him to Earth. Then he arrives for Jane to say "Where did he come from?" in a replay.

The rest of the movie is straight-forward -- Jane and her friends try to figure out why Thor seems so crazy but serious about being Thor, then trying to get Mjolnir from SHIELD, then meeting his Asgardian friends and fighting the Destroyer before Thor returns to Asgard to defeat Loki.

But here's my alternative plot structure: I would have shown all of the Thor on Earth stuff FIRST, from the moment of his arrival, and saved the flashback for LATER. You see, by focusing on the Earth events it lets the audience participate in Jane's confusion about whether or not to believe this blond dude is really a god of thunder. Maybe he's just delusional. Him trying to pick up the hammer and failing creates the possibility that he's just nuts (although there would still be the hammer to create ambiguity and hope).

Then, he could explain the backstory to Jane as a dialogue that becomes the flashback OR he could envision those events while he's "dead" from the Destroyer, before regaining his powers. I think it would be a more interesting take on "is this really happening or is he crazy" -- whereas starting with Asgard like that makes it evident that he's a hero on a quest to regain his honour. The ambiguity to me seems more interesting, but that's just what I would have done as a writer. It would add more weight to the tension between Jane believing in him and his behaviour as a god of thunder in a world of modern mortals. We know as an audience that she should believe him because we already saw the truth -- if we're denied that information as she is, then her leap of faith becomes weightier and the emotional journey stronger.

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That would be an interesting

That would be an interesting way to go.

I wonder if they considered it but didn't do that, or if they never even considered it. That said, it could be that people might have decided not to do that because they didn't trust people to stick around long enough to find out who he was.

Alternately, I suppose they might have decided not to on the basis of the idea that people know Thor's a god so they won't get much tension out of that.


That said, I'd be interested in seeing the version you propose.

Dramatic Irony

I think the tension, for me anyway, arises in Jane Foster's experience, not Thor's. I found this watching X-Men: First Class as well -- I've known Professor X and Magneto were friends who had a falling out in the movie series for a long time, but it was interesting to see Mystique's character development from hiding her gifts to proud of them -- I found her the emotional heart of the story, as it displayed the difference between Charles and Erik in a tangible way.

So Jane's leap of faith in Thor would be stronger because we'd know something she didn't, but not have seen it enough so that we could participate in her uncertainty. Then the Asgardian scenes are a reward for riding out the tension.

I think the audience would like being in on the dramatic irony, and everyone would already be aware that a Marvel movie about Thor he's going to be the hero in the end. And I think the Earth scenes, especially fighting SHIELD, were engaging enough to maintain interest.

Just a plot possibility that I would like to see in like a director's cut or something. I need to make friends with Kenneth Branagh.

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